I love fiction writing, and I find as a story writer, that getting other people's opinion on your work is very helpful. Here is what I have wrote so far on one, and please comment underneath. :) Thank you.
An icy breath left my lungs in a gasp. An eeire neon blue light shone from behind the machine, something that I was sure, had not originated on earth. A long and flexible hand grasped the long polished metal. My master piece, had it worked?